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The Film is made in the year 1994 from the director „Luc Besson“
The Actors are:

Jean Reno, he plays „Leon“, the main character. He is an Headhunter and an proffesionell Killer.

Natalie Portman plays the 12 Years old Mathilda. She is the second main character. Because of that movie she get famous. 5 Years after „Leon – The Profesional“ she plays in other famous movies like Starwars and so on...

Gary Oldman plays the third character, the agent Stansfield, who hunts Drugdealer.

„Leon – The Professional“ is an action film with some love comedy. In the Center of the movie stays the relationship between the 12 Years old mathilda and the Killer Leon.

Leon is a proffesionell Killer in New York, who works for Tony, the Italian Mafia Boss. He kills rival Gangs. Leon dont have a Family or friends. The only thing what he has, is a plant. In his building there lives Mathilda with her family. They are his neighbors. The father of mathilda deals with drugs. On one day, mathilda goes shopping, and while this, the Drug Agents from the US Police storms the apartment from mathildas family and killed them. The Police Agent Stansfield pick up the Cocaine and use it for himself. As mathilda comes back from shopping, Leon rescued her. After that, mathilda find out, that Leon is a „Cleaner.“ So she want, to learn how to kill somebody. Leon train with her, and Mathilda knows then how to works with weapons. On one mission Leon kills a Police officer by a mistake, it was a mate from Stansfield. Stansfield find out that the Mafia boss send the Killer. Tony gave the Cops the address from Leon. 8 SWAT Guys storms his flat, but he killed them. Mathilda escaped through a Air Shaft. Leon take the dress from a SWAT Guy, and as they storm again the flat, they bring him out. Leon wants to escape as a SWAT Guy but Stansfield saw him and follow him. Stansfield shoot him down from the back. And he goes to him. Leon was on the ground, and Leon give him the Activator of a Grenade and says „Here, this is a present from Mathilda“. Leon and Stansfield die. Later, mathilda goes to school, and she took the plant from Leon and put it in the ground. That was the end of the film, and then it comes a Song from Sting which is Called „Shape of my Heart“. This song shows some characters from Leon and the dramatical end

Answer 1

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Mannomann!!!
Also erst mal:

The film was made by Luc Besson.

Es ist mir zuviel Arbeit, deine Fehler zu korrigieren.
Schau selbst noch mal drüber. ich würds komplett neuschreiben, da es schlecht ist. Du übersetzt das meiste wörtlich aus dem Deutschen, du wechselst planlos zwischen present und past, du machst sehr viele grammatische Fehler, und du beschreibst Unnötiges.
Unbedingt überarbeiten.

Achtung: Die Bearbeitung meines Vorschreibers ist auch nicht viel besser als deine. Er übernimmt die meisten deiner Fehler.

Answer 2

The Film is made in the year 1994 from the director „Luc Besson“
The Actors are:

Jean Reno, he plays „Leon“, the main character. He is an Headhunter and an proffesionell Killer.

Natalie Portman plays the 12 Years old Mathilda. She is the second main character. Because of that movie she get famous. 5 Years after „Leon – The Profesional“ she plays in other famous movies like Starwars and so on...

Gary Oldman plays the third character, the agent Stansfield, who hunts Drugdealer.

„Leon – The Professional“ is an action film with some love comedy. In the Center of the movie stays the relationship between the 12 Years old mathilda and the Killer Leon.

Leon is a gang enforcer in New York, who works for Tony, the Italian Mafia Boss. He kills rival Gangsters. In his building lives Mathilda with her family. Mathilda's Father is a drug dealer. One day, Mathilda goes shopping, and her family gets killed by Police. Police Agent Stansfield picks up the Cocaine and uses it for himself. As Mathilda comes back from shopping, Leon rescues her.

After that, mathilda find out, that Leon is a „Cleaner.“ So she want, to learn how to kill somebody to get revenge. Leon trains her as his assisstant. During a mission Leon kills a Police officer by mistake, who was a friend of Stansfield. The cop finds out, that the Mob boss Tony sent the Killer. He gave the Cops Leons address. Police raids his apartment, but he killes them. Mathilda and Leon escape but get seperated. Leon tries to escape, disguised as a SWAT member, but Stansfield sees it and follows him. Stansfield shoot him down from behind and he closes in on Leon, lying on the ground. Leon uses a grenade to kill Stansfield and himself. The film ends with Mathilda attending school, and she took Leons potted plant and plants it in the local park. The ending theme is Sting's „Shape of my Heart“.

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